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story overview - MARIONette

Post by Parade on Sun May 18, 2008 9:00 pm

This is a... story idea I had a while ago, that I thought I would write out into a proper story, but then my friend said it would make a good mini movie. So while I adapt it into that, would you like to read the summary?
MARION:ette (story summary)




In Fallon Village there was a girl named Andina. She was very insecure with herself and consequently did not have any friends, and so grew up very lonely. Her parents were little-known doll maker’s who had recently gone to a faraway village to sell their dolls as they had fallen on hard times. However, they did not return, and for three weeks Andina waited for them. She worked on a life-sized doll, which she called Marion, and planned to show it to her parents when they came back, as a surprise. She said it was her “masterpiece”. On the last day of the third-week, Andina received devastating news: her parents had been killed when their train back had fallen off the tracks.

Andina blamed the dolls for her parent’s death, and vowed never to follow in her parent’s footsteps a doll maker, despite once aspiring to be one. She threw out all of the dolls and toys in her house into the basement, anything that reminded her of her parents. However, she could not bring herself to throw away Marion. Instead, she gave the doll a mind and a soul, but she still needed for it a heart.

That night, she snuck into the Desveaux Manor, and into the cemetery. She dug up the grave of Lucy Desveaux, who had recently died at the tender age of nine due to a fatal illness (and since then the manor had slowly been slipping into disrepair as the family of the house became too distraught to care). She removed the girl’s heart, and placed it into the chassis of her masterpiece. Marion began to move, however, her heart never beat.



Years later, and the two girls, Andina and Marion, were best friends. No one knew that Marion was really a doll, and instead thought she was an orphan who had recently moved to Fallon. She had no memories of her past, and so the village concluded her parents had died traumatically and had therefore caused Marion to suppress her own memories.

Marion had a strange fascination with dolls and puppets and toys, and claimed to be able to talk to them, causing the village to believe she was quite mad. They decided it was probably a comfort for her, something that had settled into her when her parents had died, yet although they felt sympathy, they were reluctant to spend long amounts of time with her.

The exception to that was Andina, who Marion had affectionately nicknamed “Di” (the villagers at first were quite surprised at this, it sounded like “die”, an obvious nod to the death of her parents, however they soon discovered there was no malice behind it, and besides, Andina did not seem to mind), who also seemed to believe that Marion could talk to toys.

They made a strange pair; a girl who detested dolls and toys and another who was absolutely obsessed with them. It was this obsession that had caused Marion to leave Shibellu House, where she had been previously residing with Andina after she had offered, and move into Rapisuri House with her large collection of toys. Nonetheless they were strong friends, and one was hardly ever seen without the other.

Marion’s favourite toy was a teddy bear named Abel who she considered as important to her as Andina herself, a fact which Andina found slightly overbearing.

When Marion asked Abel why she was able to speak to dolls, and no one else seemed to, Abel told her to put her hand on her heart. He said that because her heart did not beat, she was just like them, and therefore was able to speak to the toys.

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One day, there came news of a new toyshop opening in Fallon, called Mr. Murray’s Toys. Obviously, Marion was extremely excited and went to see on the very same day and hour it opened with Abel (Andina had declined to come for obvious reasons). She found herself in a literal paradise as she saw the shelves upon shelves of beautiful, hand-crafted dolls and toys.

However, while walking through she laid eyes upon the most beautiful mannequin she had ever seen. On a desk scattered with toy parts and drawings, there was a boy who had his head rested on his arms as he lay, apparently, asleep. He was quite still, leading Marion to conclude he was merely a decoration for the shop. She moved a hand to touch his cheek, yet as soon as she did his eyes snapped open.

Startled, Marion fell backwards and knocked a shelf, and a doll fell off. She caught it before it could shatter, but began apologising profusely to the doll, who assured her she was fine. Marion replaced the doll on the shelf, only to realise the boy still behind her.

He had seen her talk to the doll and said something that made Marion paralyse for a moment: “So you can speak to the toys, too?” She replied, tentatively: “Does your heart not beat, also?” He did not understand, and explained that he could speak to the toys because he had a bond with them, and so could hear in his mind what they were saying, unlike how Marion could speak to them physically and literally.

She, however, nodded with a sad smile and agreed, saying that was how she felt as well. It was, after all, still the truth.

The boy introduced himself as Klein, Mr. Murray’s shop assistant and apprentice. He showed Marion the toys he had made, which were in small section at the back, embarrassed and saying that they were nowhere near as good as Mr. Murray’s, however, Marion disagreed, claiming that Klein’s toys had a charm all their own.

It was at that point Abel made himself known, and told Klein of Marion’s extensive toy collection, “Some of which,” he added slyly, “she made herself.” Despite Marion’s own self-conscious protests, Klein insisted that he see them.

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They went back to Rapisuri House, where Klein was amazed at the sheer amount of dolls she had, more so than was in the store. Marion showed him the dolls she had made herself that, although were not by any means as amazing as Mr. Murray’s or Klein’s, had the most beautiful hand-sewn dresses and frocks and clothes. Klein insisted on showing Mr. Murray and having Marion create the clothing for the dolls they made. Although bashful, Marion was amazed that she had an offer like this presented to her and accepted right away.

Mr. Murray himself agreed with Klein’s praise and Marion was hired to make the clothes for their toys.



Now in her own heaven, Marion and Klein grew close as Andina stood by and watched. Growing increasingly jealous of their budding relationship, she decided to do the same to Marion.

And so entered Calcifer Desveaux, who Andina decided to court in order to make Marion regret, in her opinion, deserting her. However, this seemed to have the adverse affect on Marion, who, upon first seeing Calcifer immediately called him “brother”. This shocked those who heard, who berated Marion for being so casual in saying so, especially since Calcifer had lost his sister, whom he was very close to.

Calcifer, however, did not mind in the least. It was also from him that Marion heard the shocking story of his sister’s desecrated grave, and how no one knew who had done so. He vowed to find the person who had done so, and stated in a chilling voice that he would “never forgive them”.

As soon as Marion met Calcifer, she started to have strange dreams of his younger self playing with her. However, she envisaged herself as his little sister and learned just how close he and Lucy once were, and how devastated he was at her death. One dream she had that did not fit into the same prefigures as her others was a conversation between Calcifer and a woman who was seemingly his mother:



In a darkened room, a woman sits in an armchair next to the fire, staring into its depths. Calcifer opens the door and announces his return home. He states about a girl he had met that day “who reminds me remarkably of Lucy, mother. I think you should meet her, you would undoubtedly like her”. However, the mother heaves a sob and says: “Child, do not be silly. Lucy is dead and there is nothing, nothing that will bring her back.” Sadly, Calcifer replies: “That may be true, mother, but… I am still here” before he leaves.



Klein and Calcifer became quite close friends, and so too did Marion. And, while Andina was not being shunned, her own mind began playing tricks on her as the prospect of her loneliness became a monster that began to control her every move. She began to taunt Marion’s attempts at her dress making, funnelling her anger to the poor girl. In her mind, Andina justified herself by saying that she had created Marion and so had every right to treat the girl as a puppet, especially since “Marion herself had started to become more of an individual and stopped trying to ‘belong’ to Andina”.

Because of Andina’s increasingly malicious remarks, Marion started to blame and hate herself, until one day she ultimately stopped working at the shop. After she left crying, Klein and Calcifer went to confront Andina. Justifying her actions completely, Andina then flew into a rage, running back to her house and finding the sketchbook with all of the drawings and designs she had made and collected when first making Marion, and threw them across the room.



The next day, as Marion was walking miserably through the village, a woman came up to her and asked if Andina was okay: “You are close with the girl, right? I heard the most terrific bang come from her house yesterday, and was wondering if anything had happened to her.” Despite everything Andina had said, she was still Di in Marion’s mind, and she ran off to Shibellu House to make sure Andina was okay.

When she arrived, the house was deserted. Walking up to Andina’s bedroom, she saw the sketchbook lying disregarded against a wall, obviously having been thrown there in anger.

Finding the cause of the noise, Marion picked it up to see what had so angered her friend, and was horrified with what she saw. The truth finally being discovered, she ran away with the book, Abel lying abandoned on the floor.



Three days passed and neither Marion nor Andina were seen. Klein and Calcifer went to Marion’s house to find it deserted, and then went to Andina’s. Instead of finding it the same, they found Abel. Panicking now, Klein asked Abel where Marion had gone, but receiving an unsure answer the three decide to search high and low for the girl.

However, a noise came from the basement of Shibellu House. Opening it and descending, they saw Andina lying on the floor, surrounded by broken dolls and toys, which Andina had thrown into the basement after her parent’s death.

After waking her up, the boys demanded to know where Marion was. Andina denied knowing anything, having been in the basement since the day before Marion’s disappearance. They forced her to go and search for the girl with them, and when back upstairs Andina was horrified to see the sketchbook gone. She realised what happened but refused to answer Klein and Calcifer’s questions, infuriating them as she kept her secrets.

Klein and Abel, and Calcifer and Andina searched the entire village for Marion, with no results. Nearing dusk, they decided to check in the one place they had yet to search: Desveaux Forest.

There they found her, lying in a clearing with the sketchbook clutched to her chest, seemingly dead. With a cry of anguish Klein cradled Marion’s lifeless body in his arms, whispering for her to wake up. Calcifer took the sketchbook from Marion’s embrace and was about to open it when Andina threw herself at him, trying her utmost to get it away from him.

Klein asked Andina if she ever really cared for Marion, causing her to hesitate and thus allowed Calcifer to tear the sketchbook away from her. He opened the book and discovered everything: from the fact that Marion was a doll to finding out that it was Andina who destroyed his sister’s grave.

Barely controlling himself, he told Andina to get away. He said that it was only the fact that neither Marion nor Lucy would have wanted him to hurt her, but still he was barely holding himself back. Andina ran away from the clearing, leaving Calcifer holding both the sketchbook and Abel, and Klein cradling the lifeless body of Marion:



“I… I don’t care if you are a puppet, Marion. To me, you are still a person. A very important person. Calcifer and Abel think so too. Mr. Murray thinks so too. So don’t leave us. Please, don’t leave us. Just open your eyes, Marion, just open your eyes. I love you.



And Marion’s heart, for the first time in her life, began to beat.



As things settled down, Marion returned to work at the toyshop. She found she could no longer talk to the toys, now being “alive” (as her heart now beat), but Klein taught her how she could still hear what they said, so she was still able to keep friends with Abel and her dolls.

Calcifer was finally able to let go of Lucy’s passing and took over his mother as the head of Desveaux Manor, which, since Lucy’s death, had been abandoned, and he then returned it to its full glory. When Mr. Murray passed away, Klein took over the store and with the help of Marion made it into a prospering business, the dolls becoming some of the most celebrated in the country.

Andina and Marion never talked again. Marion regretted this slightly, having never been able to confront her former friend herself, as well as not being able to thank her for making her, nor being able to forgive her for what she had done. Their relationship dissolved, no one noticed when Andina left the village and was never heard from again.

And Marion, Klein, Calcifer and indeed Abel lived, in true, fairytale style, Happily Ever After.

-Fin-




Possibly the weirdest, sappiest, stupidist thing ever? Or might be good. In any case, I'd love to know your opinions.

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Post by Rutile on Mon May 19, 2008 2:23 am

This sounds like a really cool story.... I'd love to see how it'd turn out as an actual book, or however you were intending to go with it.

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Post by Parade on Mon May 19, 2008 12:03 pm

Thank you very much ^_^

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Post by Reiko on Mon May 19, 2008 3:24 pm

Oooh you sent me this the other week, it's awesome!!
You have to let me see the final thing ok? Very Happy

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Post by Rutile on Sat Sep 20, 2008 3:01 am

How is this going? I really, really, really want to know!!!
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